The strength of family helps me out day to day. My family means the world to me, if it wasn’t for them I don’t know what I would do or who I would be. Family to me is a word filled with many meanings. It means strength, peace, happiness, and unity. I believe having a family whom you can talk to and be yourself with is a true treasure in life. Family helps me forget all the bad and brings out all the good. Because family is everything to me, I believe strongly in the power of family.
Family gives me strength anytime that I am looking for comfort. If I have a problem, they are always there to help me and stand by me when I need them. They always have the right thing to say to help me think positively and to think that everything will be fine. When my grandfather passed away five years ago, as a family, we supported each other and went through this difficult time together.
Coming together in holidays or on random celebrations helps me forget about the rest of the world. I feel at peace when my family and I get together and enjoy each other’s company. Though, like many other families, we have our little arguments, we never hold a grudge because we know that family will always be family. We always resolve our issues peacefully which gives an atmosphere of tranquility.
While in this tranquil state, my family shares a breath of happiness. Weddings, birthdays, births, and other festivities are a time to turn up our happy meter. Happiness can be felt through the stories of our roots, exchange of memories, and constant laughter. Tears fill our eyes not from sadness but from joy. This happiness alleviates any pain and helps you feel better at the end of the day.
Together as one is another way to describe the power of family. Though most of my family is overseas, we manage to stay close and keep our traditions alive. We are united by one culture, one love, and one heart. This unity plays a strong role in my life and the way I am. I love being close to my family and having gatherings that bond us closer together.
Like glue, my family will always be joined. Through thick and thin we will always be a family filled with strength, peace, and happiness. No matter if we are millions miles away, we are still a family. Friends can come and go but family is forever. I believe in the power of family; I believe that family is power.
Post Write:
- I believe that I stated my point on this topic. I repeated a couple of times of how I believe in the power of family. I also wrote examples of how important family is to me.
- The remains that still need to be done is I could be very specific on the examples of how family is power, maybe I could focus on one event that made me believe family is power.
- Questions to ask readers: Is this essay easy to understand the main idea?
Did my ideas flow smoothly?
Peer Review Reading Journal
ReplyDeleteDuring our writing workshops, you’ll be working with a “critical partner,” someone who will read your work seriously and offer constructive comments. Please offer your response to your partner’s draft, using this template as a guide (you may add responses not prompted here as well). On the last day of the workshop, I’d like you to bring one hard copy to class and post another copy on your partner’s blog. As with the Textbook Reading Journal, I’ll be grading your work according to the following criteria:
Appropriateness to the question
Relevance and precision of detail from the reading
Fullness of your response
Depth of insights
Thanks for agreeing to help a classmate and for being a respectful reader.
Reviewer’s Name:_ Maria Borges
Date: 9/20/2011
Partner’s Name and Title of Paper Reviewed: The power of family
In your own words, fully and with precision, describe what the assignment is asking the writer (your partner) to do? Please use your own words rather than merely quote from the assignment.
The assignment is asking for the writer to write a short essay about something that they believe in. In the writing they have to explain something that has happened to them in order for them to believe in what their writing about. It can be funny, personal, serious, anything.
To what extent has your partner met the expectations of the assignment? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what works well there. Again, try to use your own words.
From reading her essay I get a clear vision of what she believes in. She explains how family is very important to her and how she believes that they are the most important thing in life to her. She explains how her family is always there for her and they help her get through any obstacle that comes her way
What area needs more work? Why? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what isn’t working.
The writing itself is good, she explains a lot about family and what they mean to her, but she didn’t mention about an experience that she had where her family was there to support her and make her get through what ever she was going through to make me understand why she believes how she believes about family.
Please indicate TWO questions about the draft and at least ONE suggestion for ways to improve it.
What has is an experience that your family has helped you deal ?
What were some things that they did to help you deal with what ever you went through?
In your essay you mention that your family never holds grudges and you guys resolve your issues peacefully, I think you should go into more detail, and explain a certain argument or fight that has happened and how it was dealt with for you to state that in the writing.