Distracted while driving
Works Cited:
Wilson, Fernando A., and Jim P. Stimpson. “Trends In Fatalities From Distracted Driving In The United States, 1999 To 2008.” American Journal Of Public Health 100.11(2010): 2213-
2219. Academic Search Premier. 2010. Web. 17 November 2011.
In the article, Wilson and Jim analyzed the trends in distracted driving fatalities and their relation to the use of cell phones and texting. They examined fatalities that occurred on United States public roads from 1999 to 2008 that were based on the data records that were provided by the Fatality Analysis Reporting System. The number of fatalities from distracted driving increased from 4572 in 2005 to 5870 in 2008. They concluded that the fatalities were caused by distracted drivers that were using their cell phones, texting, eating, reading, or other devices while driving; distracted driving is a public safety hazard. Wilson and Jim are strictly suggesting that stricter laws be put into practice banning the major issue of accidents which is the use of cell phones.
Wilson, a member of the Department of Health Management and Policy and Jim a member of the Department of Social and Behavioral Sciences, focus on the issue of distracting driving fatalities increasing from the years 1999 to 2008 in the United States. They strongly argued that the major cause of driving fatalities is drivers being distracted doing other tasks while they driving. Wilson and Jim constantly repeated that distracting driving is a growing public safety hazard. They use the data records from the Fatality Analysis Reporting System to support their argument; information that was collected within 30 days of the accident. They provided a lot of statistics showing the increase of fatalities from 1999 to 2008. The best part about this article is that they give evidence to show how major this issue is. They clearly state the issue and suggest some methods to resolve the increase of fatalities in distracted driving.
Post Write:
- I feel like I included most of the requirements into the annotation. I included the full citation in the beginning of my annotation. I stated the author’s argument in the second paragraph “that the major cause of driving fatalities is drivers being distracted doing other tasks while they driving”. I wrote the annotation using my own words, paragraph one “They examined fatalities….”. I also tried to get an article that was recent and would be intended for my audience.
- I still need to work on adding signal phrases to make clear the author’s ownership over the ideas expressed.
- 1) Is the issue of the topic relatable?
2) Would the authors’ be people we can rely on for their information based on who they are?
Talk Back:
ReplyDelete- You liked the subject I chose to write about. I provided my summary with information and it is accessible. When I refer to the author I should use the author’s last name. I provided a summary that is helpful to understand, you especially like the part: They use the data records from the Fatality Analysis Reporting System to support their argument; information that was collected within 30 days of the accident. I should work on my second paragraph to make it precise. I used good MLA style. I should be more precise about this part; “The best part about this article is that they give evidence to show how major this issue is.”
- You did not miss anything. I did not have much clue into how to write the annotation. Your feedback helped me understand what I did well and what I need to revise.
- I learned that I have to be precise when I am writing. This sentence was not precise “The best part about this article is that they give evidence to show how major this issue is.” My readers can get lost and not understand what I mean. By transferring what I learned from this assignment to other one, I can let my readers understand my writing and it will also improve my writing.